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I worked really hard at focusing to write this paper. I submitted it to her yesterday after spending a LOT of time trying to read and write well. It's a topic that I don't especially like, looked at from a perspective that I don't care for. It's easy for me to learn if I'm interested and engaged (as I suspect it's true for most people) but if I'm not, it's a struggle. It felt like when I wrote my last paper for the last class for my last degree, I needed discipline to push myself to complete my work. Here's my feedback verbatim (cut and pasted) (bolded for my emphasis and my comments in red)

I have just read your paper, and it was very interesting, wel lput together with good references and a good overview of the context and uses of Alinsky's theory of leadership.  What I would add to your paper is some specific references to the Rules for Radical book. L can't really tell unless you reference him as a primary source if you have read the book So you're telling me that you don't believe I read the book? And you're not noticing the 4 times I cite it within the paper and it is listed under references.  Certainly his attitude on means ends reasoning in the chapter, but some of the strategies that he recommends you need to get at the heart of his writiing.  For example in the chapter "Tactics"  he writes a third rule:  "Whenever possible go outside of the experience of the enemy.  Here you want to cause confusion, fear, and retreat."    What is toxic about this? Define toxic.You didn't notice that on page 6? He is writing for how leaders should conduct themselves in a democracy?  Does this statement look like someone who promotes democratic values or not?  In a domocracy, are we supposed to have "enemies," or just different viewpoints.  This appears to me vary toxic.  What is missing clearly from your paper so far is not coming to grips with the book itself. I could almost l assume, since you never refer to the book that you did not read the book. Really? you didn't see the 4 times I referenced it?
Statements like the above are similar to what you find in Machiavelli.  He is a divide and conquer, type leadership theory that treats people in a democratic republic as though they were enemies.  Do you othink this is good democratic theory? Is this what you would like a President of the U.S to say on TV from the oval office? I hate this since I really don't follow politics too much...
Don't change a think, just add a few more pages where you actually pick out key ideas, sentences, and phrases. Also knowing leadership theory you can refer to some. You didn't notice this on page 7? These writing exercises are designed for you to think through and apply all the theories that you have read.  For example, I certainly wouldn't say he was a "servant leader" and I don't know if I would call his leadership ethic moral.  Do you?    Call me if you have any questions, but just work on referencing the book you were assigned to read.'Ok, I guess I'll just add another page or so quoting the stupid book Be sure to define your or any terms.

And I won't even comment about her poor writing!
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School Friday 5-9pm Sat 9-5pm Sun 9-12p

The instructor was very good and kept it entertaining. It's always so interesting to me when I start a new class. I often feel pretty intimidated by some of the things that people do but then for whatever reason as I get to know them, they aren't *so* impressive. Perhaps that's a judgment on my part because a lot of people don't participate in class. I think that's important because some of your grade is based on that. My classroom is in the new building on campus which is really nice.

Crashed at my Dad's house for Fri and Sat night since it was closer, that was SO nice and really enjoyed the time with him too.

I also had a wrap up session with my shrink. I enjoyed my time but feel rather ambivalent about the whole thing. Do I feel it really helped or did the crisis pass(or at least slow down) ?

Sunday night I had free tickets to attend a local outdoor music festival. It was nice but I realize that I do really prefer predominant queer or women space. I don't want to be too biased because I believe a lot of that is based on prejudice and I don't want people to judge me based on only one exterior trait and therefore I shouldn't judge them either. I enjoyed the time with A. I didn't get to stay too late and see it all since it was an hour home and A had school, I've got 2 11 hour days in a row.

I was looking over my schedule for the next month and I really feel a time crunch coming on. This weekend TF asked to switch weekends but I said no because I've got too much going on. I want to go see www.girlyman.com on Friday night, 2nd job on Saturday(4 hours) I've got another party invite on Sat and Sunday is church. In that weekend somewhere, I've got to do homework(2 page paper and prepare for a 5-7 minute presentation, read 6 articles and some amount of chapters) laundry and clean the house, grocery shop. I don't know if I'll be able to get it all done.


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